Pensieve's Poetic License ~ April Challenge



SPRING UNCERTAINTY




Reaching for skyline

The snow on the foothills

Retreats


Perching ‘Neath rain cover

The finch on the feeder

Huddles


Evading the frost bite

The peach by the green house

Blossoms


Disregarding the forecast

I dress for the weather

Challenges


Refracting bowed promise

The sun, through the rain shower

Prevails






Interest in other participants Haiku? The Robin of Spring can be found HERE.

Comments

Anonymous said…
Nice -

That is a different form of Haiku than I used.
7:44 PM, April 10, 2008
Jeanette said…
Hi Pamela, lovely little poem.

The dust storm was terrible,
I needed your feather duster inside, oh the dust was bad you could even feel it hitting you like fine rain..
8:45 PM, April 10, 2008
Kila said…
Aww, now that makes it sound beautiful!
8:52 PM, April 10, 2008
Anonymous said…
I like it!

I used a different form of haiku as well. I like the meter on yours.
6:02 AM, April 11, 2008
Anonymous said…
Beautiful, as always. Love this form...is it Pamiku?
6:05 AM, April 11, 2008
Anonymous said…
Ha! Pamiku--gotta love that Swampmeister!

Weather on your brain? Me thinks you might be experiencing slightly lower and less Spring-like temperatures than moi. Just think--when I'm sweltering in 100 degree temps and 300% humidity--you'll be shootin' the breeze!

Love these selections, Pamela. They make perfect sense to me!
8:30 AM, April 11, 2008
Anonymous said…
very well done. Great tempo throughout - makes me want some fresh peaches!
10:14 AM, April 11, 2008
Anonymous said…
These are very, very nice. Great imagery!
12:39 PM, April 11, 2008
Anonymous said…
Very nice writing! I enjoyed the rhythm.
12:46 PM, April 11, 2008
storyteller said…
Beautifully … these poems
illustrate experiences
Universal

I usually do Haiku Friday each week but decided I could do 'double' duty since one was about Spring ;--)
Joyful Burst of Color and
Of Oddities and Change
Hugs and blessings,
4:36 PM, April 11, 2008
Wendster said…
I loved it all, but particularly loved the snow reaching for the skyline. Like it had a purpose for it's retreat. It's not just abandoning us, it's going somewhere ethereal.

Very nice!
9:25 PM, April 11, 2008
Joy T. said…
Awww what swampy said "Pamiku". Love that. Although I love your poem too :o)
12:50 AM, April 12, 2008
Walker said…
You are just so brilliant.
6:56 AM, April 12, 2008
Molly said…
Nice job , Pamela. I think that we may be having the same kind of spring. Today, I am waiting for the sun to prevail.
8:33 AM, April 12, 2008
Sandy said…
Beautiful, Pamela.

The rhythm is lovely.
2:35 PM, April 12, 2008
j said…
Very Nice!!

Have a great weekend.

Jennifer
4:39 PM, April 12, 2008
Jenni said…
I *love* the rainbow haiku! Beautiful! I should really join in on this thing. It would be good exercise for my brain.
4:07 AM, April 13, 2008
Unknown said…
Oh I like that. It all fits perfectly.
7:21 AM, April 13, 2008
kitten said…
Beautiful! I forgot to tell you that the view in the picture above is lovely! Is that from your back yard? Breath taking!
7:52 AM, April 13, 2008
Anonymous said…
I love reading your Haiku!
3:59 PM, April 13, 2008
Anonymous said…
You did a great job in capturing spring.
3:19 PM, April 14, 2008
Anonymous said…
nicely done, I like part four, we could never be prepare as the weather keeps changing

thanks for visiting visiting my blog
6:06 PM, April 14, 2008
Anonymous said…
Wonderful poem! I love the progression and key words. Very creative!

Thanks for coming by too....and I would LOVE to see that cherry blossom blizzard! (it was 97 here today)
8:16 PM, April 14, 2008
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